I know it was intentional that you kept this short, but I would love to see this expanded. I am getting an Adele sort of vive from this. Really nicely done.

This is absolutely a hit song in the making! That melody in the chorus has some beautiful lines and great rhythm to the phrasing. I'm totally with Joshua on this one.

Listened to this twice. One of your best so far in my opinion. Lovely vocal, clear, full of angst. riveting

What a great minute! I love it, it's an entire movie in just a handful of chords and words. True songsmithery.

Yes, very contemporary sound and the beginings of a grteat pop tune. Next challenge is to work it up into a 3 minute hit.

this is so great, I want more verses and minutes of this song!

Looking forward to hearing the entire song - sounds like a smash...

I really like the chorus melody lines here - I'd love to hear them repeated and given the chance to echo and bed in to my ear a bit more.

Copyright Erin Wolf 2021

Week 48 Prompt: Tell Me Everything

Secondary self-imposed challenge: Write a song in 1 minute or less (so I did and tried on a more pop-kind of sound, ope)

i remember years ago
the heavens opened up with snow
you were dancing by my side
we didn't have to hide

but now we're sitting all alone
it's cold and dark quite like stone
all the memories in my mind
some are cruel and some are kind

yet i still need to know
just why you had to go

tell me everything right now
all your fears and all your doubts
tell me why they hold you back
why we had to fade to black

did you lose your hopes and dreams
and all the joy love can bring
can you give me one last sign
or a moment of your time
to tell me everything

Tell Me Everything

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