You've done a lot of work and this piece finally talks to the right part of my brain. IMHO, more veriety in stereo placement would help differentiate main voices from supportive ones. ☺

I enjoyed first part..more. good track overall.

doodle, doodle, dooooodlidoodle... LOL... sorry. I believe it might be good for you to consider to focus a bit. Seems like you've got chops to do the right stuff, if you calm down, consider the listener and their longing for orientation.

...besides, it seems like you have some kind of brickwall EQ, keeping the whole thing inside 800Hz and 12Khz or so, haha. Strange. Headpones only?

I'm 100% sure you can do a heck of a lot better and I'm pretty much even expecting it. That track flickers your potential, but can't do it justice. You've got the stuff, though! Please, keep at it and don't be mad at me for being a bit harsh. :o\

Sorry, I have a really hard time getting into this. There are some real nice melodies and parts but to me it all seems like a mess. First of all the sound is constantly noisy which makes it hard on the ears and detracts from the actual music. Second all melodic lines seem to go into each other with some nasty dissonances as result. Even when you take it down there doesn't seem to be enough breathing room. If noisy was your goal, that's alright, just not very enjoyable to me. Otherwise I'd recommend, when doing FM to be very careful with how much modulation you apply to the carriers, especially when using anything other than sines. Work with envelopes on the modulators to give your sounds a nice attack without the sustain being overbearingly noisy. Again, some cool parts and good melodies but the presentation just doesn't work for me.

Lots of great parts in here I think, but the production is working a little against it.

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