A demo of a new song I'm working on. Any feedback appreciated.

Lyrics:

[Intro]

You tell me there’s nothing left to see
But I know you are here with me

[Verse 1]

You tell me there’s nothing left to see
But I know you are here with me

I’ll take you there, if you’ll make haste
Baren and burned, we’ll make a way

[Chorus]

The land is burned, the sky is gone
Darkness creeps, where we belong

There’s nothing left, after a fall
Can we come back, to take it all

A world must change, when far gone
Keep the truths, and admit its wrongs

It’s never too late, don’t lose pace
It’s time for us, to make haste

[Verse 2]

[Verse]

Come with me to see this place
The ground is new, cleared with grace

Traditions fall, but law still stands
A wasted world, the promised land

[Chorus]

[Instrumental]

Take me away (to make haste)
Take me away

[Bridge]

You tell me there’s nothing left to see
But I know you are here with me

[Chorus]

Make Haste [Demo]

Another demo track I'm working on.

Lyrics:

[Verse 1]

You say you have all the answers,
That you know what's best for us,
Claiming to be a chosen one,
A savior we can trust.

Preach the gospel, or so you say
What about the rest of us
If we’re broken, torn, or ripped to shreds
are we at a loss?


[Chorus]

You’re just a harbinger of faith,
Messiah complex you’ve embraced,
We’re all pawns in your game
Hypocrite veiled as one that saves


[Verse 2]

Lies of truth are truths of blind men
Rhetoric taught and prescribed
When you speak, preach, or yell them
You aren’t one to prophesy

You claim to hear a small voice
Then you speak a word divine
But all these words, they are poisoned
They trample and diminish mine


[Bridge]
 
Why, have you, brought me here?
Why are you, so unclear?

Can’t you just be sincere?
Leave me alone!

Harbinger Of Faith [Demo]

Only about half the song is done, posting to get feedback.

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