That was a really good transition from comedic to serious

Wow. I'm really impressed and obsessed with your story. You did an amazing job reading, and it was very obvious who was speaking. The concept is fantastic and there are so many layers to this! You did a great job incorporating humor, drama, and tragedy into one. My only possible suggestion would be to mention some things about the Metamorphosis earlier on in the story. After I few minutes I was worried I missed an important detail, because I still didn't know why his mouth was closed. Maybe just plant a few seeds here and there to let the readers know an explanation is coming. Excellent job!

I like the imagery you used here! The way you read it as well helped to make a clear picture.

"No no dipstick" still has me laughing! And it sounds like a real conversation two people would have with one another!

The tone of your voice really brought this sentence to life!

Such a creative and emotional story! Great job!

A tragic romantic short story in a universe where college and graduation are a literal metamorphosis.

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I am a graphic design / creative writing double major who loves comics, musical theatre, and fairy tales.

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SHU Heavenlee

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Julie Weyant

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