That was a very exciting story overall. It makes me want to see more about the characters and all their actions for next time.

I'm not sure if this had something to do with your prompt, but it was a bit confusing that a moth grabbed the rifle when there was a tic invasion. Are the moths on the tic's side or just annoying pests?

I like the "wings like stained glass" imagery.

"every tic's ticker" I love the alliteration

I love the description of the smell here. It also fits well into your story

I like the use of flittered and squelched

What a great action-packed story! I like how the ending is hopeful. It took me a couple a listens to fully understand the story. I think it would be helpful to include some more imagery at the beginning so that the reader gets that the characters are fairies from the start. I also think that you can add some description about the bat they are riding to make that part more clear as well. I think the imagery that you used was really good, but your story could benefit from more. Since your story is so action-packed you could omit the part where they find the dead parents to make room for more imagery. I liked your imagery of sense of smell. You could include more description of the other senses. Overall, it was a really intriguing story.

"In the Aftermath of the Horrendous Tick Invasion" by Rebecca Scassellati
Prompt: Williford (p. 79)
Fantasy
Almost 1000 words

Scassellati FF3 Draft

I am a graphic design / creative writing double major who loves comics, musical theatre, and fairy tales.

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