So happy to hear you.  I love the mellow sound and the guitar makes me think of a dusty desert highway...haunting lyrics

ahhhh. Welcome back Deborah--- missed your musics--

I love your changes! unexpected chords that really fit.  the change to major is very powerful.

:) ....ahhhh that's the stuff.  "your own light" (and etc) - the chords......you kidding?  the prechorus - chorus and the way the chorus goes out?  you're kidding with that too right?   ....... its genius.  sorry .... it just is.  not sure how else to put it.  and this is a song you made with ONLY a guitar.  top to bottom it checks every box for me - this is essentially perfect songwriting.  WOW.....SO HAPPY you are back in.

Love your voice, and I like the guitar arrangement! Bravo

Love your lyrics all the way through. Your voice sounds great too! Rich a full!

my favorite from week 1, for sure. This is just SOLID, Deb. Those chords!!! what in the world?! I thought you were a pianist!! melody is just hooky as hell. So happy to hear ya!

(Verse 1)
A mighty burnt out star
hearing out more wishes tonight
You wandered off so far away 
In search of your own light
You gave others so much time

(Verse 2)
Been runnin' round in circles
Trying to straighten all your lines
When all along the shape I'm in
Depends upon my mind
I can only heal my mind

(Pre-Chorus)
I've waited years to be where I am now
My fortune it won't fade
Through pain and tears won't forget that somehow
Heaven brought me here

(Chorus)
Make me yours 
and I'll make more time
To stay the course
Reflecting your light

(Verse 3)
We're countin' on the future
We're countin' all our dimes
We're countin' down the days 'til rent
Makin' up for lost time

(Pre-Chorus)
I've waited years to be where I am now
My fortune it won't fade
Through pain and tears won't forget that somehow
Heaven brought me here

(Chorus)
Make me yours 
and I'll make more time
To stay the course
Reflecting your light

(Bridge)
It's simple really
Can't undo what's been done
When fighting off the darkness baby
Hang your hopes on the brightest sun

(Chorus)

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