Thank you for your upload Tony! There is good bunch great ideas in this piece. I think I can catch the emotion and feeling you were going for. Putting that aside I can't help thinking that this could be much much better with some modifications. The first seconds are a bit of a question mark to me. They seem somewhat unconnected to the rest of the piece. I'd suggest remaking the intro. From around 1:00 to around 1:14 I can catch good ideas but they don't get to speak for themselves really. The texture is way too thick, too loud, too much reverb. I'd remix it and give the instruments space to breathe and speak. The rest of the piece sounds amazing! The only thing that dampens the feeling is the white noise covering it. My suggestion is to remove it or make it sound more like silent vintage crackling noise. Take it to the back. Now it is too much in the front. All this said, I still like this piece and I know it has potential. All it needs is some space to breathe and it will come alive.

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Anthony G. Foti is a Boston based multi-instrumentalist, composer, and performer. As a composer, he is known for creating original sounds, symphonic textures, and melodies that  blend a mix of pop, rock and cinema. As a performer, Anthony G. Foti brings melodic and raw musicianship to the stage. Anthony commenced on a path in music at the age of 9 when he took his first piano & guitar lesson from his father Joseph. His desire to become proficient in every instrument that was accessible assisted him in following through with opportunities in recording , traveling, collaborating with other musicians, and producing quality music every time he is in the studio or takes the stage.

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