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Another off the dome freestyle while I was driving. Not great quality.

4 Ya Luv - Car Freestyle

Stoner.

How I’m Feelin’

Trick or Treat

written, produced and performed by Jah-Femi Telewa
Lyrics + meaning

The hard way

Ayeee

I got feelings that got ate for dinners = she disregards my feelings 
A cardboard breakfast cause she lacked the feelings = she gives me tasteless meals cause she doesn’t care about me
Crusing down main streets with some hoodlem fellas = she’s chilling with thugs
Turkish street gang with them sword umbrellas = violent thugs
Gangster how she walk, talk crawl with stilettos = she’s slick in the way she dresses and walks 
Don’t worry how she think she got them big letters= don’t worry about her intellect she’s uses big words 
Wet dripping look she like them crispy lettuce = she’s chilling look seductive the way she sweats looks as enticing as crispy lettuce 
Stay praying hoping that she won’t forget us = I’m still hoping she’s got love for me

Put sum in it stomp with it = put some effort in how you walk
I’m with it, luckily you’re in session = I’m on your side and you’re up for a seductive dance in front of me



ChatGPT Analysis: Now that I understand the street slang behind your lines, the piece takes on a much more nuanced and authentic feel. Let me re-analyze and re-rate it based on the deeper context you’ve provided.

Revised Analysis
	1.	Themes:
	•	Unrequited Love and Emotional Neglect: “Feelings that got ate for dinners” and “cardboard breakfast” capture a sense of being emotionally discarded, yet still yearning for connection.
	•	Street Life Vibes: Lines about “hoodlum fellas” and “Turkish street gang” set the scene of a gritty urban backdrop, emphasizing the harsh reality of her world.
	•	Admiration for Her Complexity: Despite her coldness and detached demeanor, you admire her style, intellect, and seductive nature, as shown in “gangster how she walk” and “wet dripping look.”
	•	Tough Love: “Hard grind love is your true confession” encapsulates the rawness of the relationship dynamic, where affection is expressed in a rugged, unapologetic way.
	2.	Imagery and Wordplay:
	•	Street-Rooted Authenticity: Your use of slang and metaphors, such as “sword umbrellas” (violent imagery) and “crispy lettuce” (a fresh and enticing look), paints a vivid picture.
	•	Contrast Between Emotion and Edge: The juxtaposition of love and street culture adds depth, making it more than just a surface-level description of a relationship.
	•	Commanding Presence: The phrases “put sum in it stomp with it” and “gangster how she walk” portray her as a commanding figure, while still hinting at her vulnerability.
	3.	Suggestions for Further Strength:
	•	Clarify Connections: Some transitions, like from “crispy lettuce” to “stay praying,” still feel slightly abrupt. Adding a line to bridge the emotional and visual layers could enhance the flow.
	•	Deepen Emotional Contrast: The tough love theme is strong—highlight how it affects you on a personal level to add emotional resonance.

Revised Rating

Now that I see the full depth of your piece, I’d rate it 8.5/10. The street slang and urban grit give it authenticity, and the raw emotion adds a layer of vulnerability. With minor tweaks to enhance the flow and explore the emotional tension further, it could hit a solid 9 or higher. This is a strong piece with a unique voice.

Hard grind love is your true confession = she like tough love

The Hard Way (short rap session SRS)

The Real

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Self produced, from instrumental to vocal mix/mastering, in under 2 hours lol

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How I’m Feelin’

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