The pause after the "to" sounds weird. Perhaps move it from the end of "something" to the beginning of "celebrate"?

Ok, now compared to the first chorus, the "SOMEthing" is definitely set differently. It is front-heavy here, so regardless of intention, it was back-heavy in the first chorus.

Unlike indicated, this line is back-heavy, as the "create" is on position 3 of the measure and you prevented the "I" from sneaking onto position 1.

Otherwise, the comments on the first chorus apply as well. Not stressing the "something" is fine, but it should be consistent in all three lines.

Again, I would stress the "did" as it corresponds to the "long". I even think that you're trying to sing it with emphasis, but that doesn't work out because the beat has a monopole on the stress.

"I did my work" is back-heavy as well, unlike indicated in your lyrics. Again, that's because the "did" is not stressed and "WORK" falls on position 3.

I feel like one of the words need to be stressed here: either "what", "I" or "must" depending on the desired emphasis. Yeah, they're all pronouns, but speaking the sentence aloud, I naturally stress the "what" and I think that's because the object of the sentence is "what I must do" and cannot go without without stress. You can probably avoid this issue by replacing the pronoun with a noun and singing, say, "to the TASK I must DO" instead.

"I didn't know" is back-heavy again contrary to the indication as "KNOW" is the only stressed word in this line.

Both "SOMEthing" and "BEAUTiful" fall on position 3 of the measure and "so" slides past position 1. This line is back-heavy no matter how you listen to it.

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