Great line: why do you lie when you're down!!! So much in that.  Dig the vibe of this one overall.  Could listen to that chorus all day! :)

I love the chorus, great melodic rhythm to suit the prompt!

WHOAH that vocal is stunning, hit me immediately.  you CRUSHED this vocal performance.  beautiful.  this is a really magnetic, catchy tune to boot, and that title line really is super clever and witty and I'd build a song around it too if I came up with it.  so so so so so well done here top to bottom.  did I mention how stunning the vocal performance is?  LOL.  I mean wow.

Please stay in. Sing a user manual, whatever; I'd like to hear you sing melodies like that. Yep, catchy as hell. Thanks for sharing!

What more can I say 
y’all don’t even listen 
It's been a long time
Will y’all listen to this one
No questions answered
Just answers questioned
I’ve been listening 
I’m still listening 
But I’m done talking 
and it’s time for some action
Look, I need to see results
It’s time for some action
I see y’all on the news
I can tell when it’s acting
I’m making more dough
that ain’t the only thing that’s taxing




No glamour shots, 
just the hammer cocked
with the grammar locked
So many conceited vanity creeps 
So shallow that it cuts deep
Razor thin blades
Some days I forget that I’m me
Seventh Tzun who the hell is he 
Alter ego on the decline
or maybe he's just taking over
Rise of the Zealots, what? Another takeover?
Back to the main show
make sure the break is over



By night all we do is ride out
By day is when we take flight
but make sure we keep them things out
blood suckers with their fangs out
when the beat hits 
we make sure to let it bang out 
I'm from the hood stupid
what's your life about
I know the struggle well
sometimes the hustle fails
I feel it all like braille 
Hard to the point like nails
I can't have  it all,
but  my destination's set to get it
If it don't bump, how can you feel it

Breaks Over

Lyrics:

For all intents and purposes
I'm still figuring out the truth
For all intents and purposes 
I dont understand you

Why do you lie when you're down (X4)

For all intents and purposes 
I just wanted to help
For all intents and purposes
You put me through hell

Why do you lie when you're down (x4)

For all intents and purposes
I think we better part ways
For all intents and purposes
I wish you better days but 

I don't lie when I'm down (x4)

Why Do You Lie When You're Down

Here's a wrote I wrote and played.


I been counting days
Tryin to find the ways
Just to make it through, yeah

You been making plays
Each and every day
Lookin out for you, yeah

After everything
That we done and seen
Guess I thought you'd change

Here we go again
Screaming in the wind
Holding on to pain, yeah 

Had me on the rope
Holding out for hope
Throw the towel in

When you knocked me down
Up before the count
Do it all again, yeah

Livin for the fight
Make you feel alive
Long as you can stand

When you're outta air
Need somebody there
Who will take your hand (help me)

Caught my breath
Now I'm ready to go
More myself
And I've been here before
The world was burnin
Yeah, before the world was burnin

Caught my breath
Now I'm ready to find
Someone else
Who won't leave me behind
With all the hurt when
The world starts burnin

Now I don't even need (no)
Somebody who will work until they bleed (no)
Nah, I'm just out here looking for some peace (yeah)
Some peace of mind and maybe harmony (oh)

How can we stand
A blast from the past
When the past was never gone

Caught my breath
Now I'm ready to go
More myself
And I've been here before
The world was burnin
Yeah, before the world was burnin

Caught my breath
Now I'm ready to find
Someone else
Who won't leave me behind
With all the hurt when
The world starts burnin

Caught My Breath (demo 10/02/24)

A creepy, spooky track I wrote and was recorded with the help of Dan Howell.  Dan did the Vocals, Keys, sound effects and along with Arwen Fonzen, did the intro story.

Lurch

Verse1:
darkness is the world i know
as I fall to the ground
I wander these streets alone
while feeling so down
 
I don’t know what to do
I want to feel joy again
but I don’t wanna trouble you
like this

Chorus1:
I just wanna feel whole again
I just wanna be back home again
I gotta make a change
ENOUGH IS ENOUGH

Verse2:
darkness is the world i live
I’m lying here on the ground
I’m lost on these streets alone
I remain feeling down
I don’t know what to do
I want to feel joy again
but I don’t wanna trouble you
like this anymore

Chorus2:
I just wanna feel whole again
I just wanna be back home again
I gotta make a change
ENOUGH IS ENOUGH

Enough is Enough

Sit Back or Dance!

Recorded with an Apogee Element 88 & Apogee Jam.

Doctor & The Young Wolf

The Best Night!

Written by: David Anadon and Arwen Fonzen
Recorded by: Ana-Ross Audio
Contact: David Anadon at Davead83@gmail.com

Why Do You Lie When You're Down

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