Demo EP Into Colourless By  3 Hours From Sundown

Broken

So here's just a random song idea I've made. Need opinions and constructive criticism, having a bit of a musicians block. How can I make this better and what can i add?

Post Punk Demo 2

Demo solo track 
Guitars - Gretsch 5122
Ibanez SDGR bass
Vocals, drums, synths, guitars, bass, programing, mixing - Zac

Ghosts Of The Destroyed - Through The Veil

Taken from the album "Under A Heart-Shaped Sun"

here I come
from the man next door
he said
that he stopped laughing long before
but everything will be alright
we are driving home
tonight

it's the flood 
that drowns you from within
it's the key to a kingdom
but I'm not the king

it's the flood 
that drowns you from within
it's the key to her kingdom
and I take it in...

we walk inside
and in the centre of all senses
we fall apart

we hurt what's close
and in the centre of all sin
we fall apart

the call her...
killing queen

(...and now I know what they mean)

Ghosts Of The Destroyed - Through The Veil

Bat Box Studios